From the prose of Petre Fischl
We got used to standing in line at seven o'clock in the morning.
At twelve noon, and again at seven o'clock in the evening.
We stood in a long queue with a plate in our hand, into which they lalded a little
warmed up water with a salty or coffee flavor. Or else they gave us
a few potatoes. We got got used to sleeping without a bed, to saluting
every uniform, not to walk on the sidewalks and then again too walk on the sidewalks
We got used to undeserved slaps, blows, and executions.ji
We got accustomed to seeing people die in their own excrement, to seeing
piled-up coffins full of corpses, to seeing the sick, amid dirt and filth and to seeing the helpless
doctors. We got used to it that from time to time, one thousand unhappy souls
would come and here that from time to time, another thousand unhappy souls would
go away...
Written by Petre Fischl
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Antwone, you did an awesome job with your butterfly. Yours like some others I have been seeing today are very appealing and make me want to see it up close. First off, I know you are a very artcistic person. I have seen some of the drawings you have done in your free time and I enjoy seeing them (not to get off subject). You really used your artistic ability to really put effort in it your butterfly and each component. It just looks really crazy (crazy in a good way of course) and packed with different objects no one else used which makes it really stand out.
ReplyDeleteOne thing I liked the most was your little coffin you made in the middle. besides me liking it, I would have wanted you to further explain why you put it there. In your tags you did mention it, but never went in depth as to why it's there and what purpose it serves. It is sort of self explanatory, but I just wanted to hear you explain it.
Aside from that, I did enjoy seeing both sides if your butterfly. It really shows you went above and beyond and that you want the person looking at it to notice it being double sided.
I would go back and proof read your tags because I did notice some minor grammatical errors and spelling errors. There weren't a lot so it wouldn't be hard to fix. I also noticed you sort of neglected explaining crucial parts of the butterfly I enjoyed seeing. Like the coffin for example, it would have been nice to see what it's meaning was to you specifically and for you to further explain why you chose to put it there like I said before. Overall like most of the butterflies I have seen, you did a fine job Antwone and hope to see something like this from you again.
Antwon, your butterfly give good representation on what prisoners would see through the time they spent inside of the camp. The drawing has a good representation on what the authors see's as he goes through the camp. The different drawing makes your butterfly more appealing when it comes to imagining what was all around the author as he lived in the camp.
ReplyDeleteThe thing that was most interesting to me, was the coffin. The coffin looks like helps me visualize how everywhere the Petr went, he would see dead bodies and open caskets piled around everywhere he would go. The coffin helps itself by giving a little description on itself, based on the prose.
I have noticed a few grammar mistakes, not really a lot just a few. Some parts arent as explained as other spots, but still good. Everything else was fine, I would advise to go back and doublecheck the few mistakes.
Just from looking at your butterfly I can tell that you worked extremely hard on it. The thing that really gets my attention is the coffin because it helps me understand a lot more about your poem, and how there would be a lot of dead bodies in the concentration camp. The thing that I like the most about your butterfly is the rose, I like how you used it to honor the Jewish people that were killed in the Concentration Camps. Even though the butterfly is almost perfect there is only one imperfection, from what I can see, the Swatzika. It is drawn wrong. Even with that imperfection in mind you still did a phenomenal job on the butterfly.
ReplyDeleteAntwone your butterfly is very nice there were maybe a few mistakes with some grammar but not too much. One thing that caught my eye was the chains I like how you added those chains to represent the woman being trapped and imprisonment. It was good that you added quotes to every sentence to help readers understand what you were trying to explain. Your drawings are good and I think adding those drawings to your butterfly helped even understand what the poem was talking about but overall very good butterfly Antwone.
ReplyDeleteGood day, Antwone! After analyzing your Butterfly, I was able to observe how beautifully executed it was! The first aspect of your Butterfly that I particularly enjoyed was your use of different materials. With inclusion of fabric as well as your Butterfly's body, it really accentuated its diversity. I also enjoyed the chain added, as it was eye catching and related to your Poem. I commend you for your work, Antwone. Keep it up!
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